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Friday, 31 August 2018

If I were flood

If I were a flood


If I were a flood

I would flood all the cities, houses and gardens until they were full with water.

My flood will even be strong enough to even bash through the windows.

Every flaming campfire will extinguish because of me.

But then all of a sudden some light behind me is evaporating me off.

By Armika 2/8/18

4 comments:

  1. Hi Armika

    I really like your poem it is some of the stuff that floods do

    Next time you could tell us about what happens at school

    This reminded me of when I made a poem about If I were a flood

    Mehakpreet

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  2. Hi Armika,
    Your writing shows creativity and imagination. It reminds me of when I was younger and my family's farm was flooded. It torn the tin from the wall of the barn! That was 20 years ago and you can still find signs left over from the damage. Next time you could make your conclusion stronger by adding some emotive words to your last sentence.

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    1. Hi Mr Ward
      Thank you,
      Next time I will make sure to use more emotive words.
      By Armika

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    2. Hi Armika,
      WOW! Your writing is really creative and I think you've really taken time to think and write your poem. Amazing work!

      It reminds me when I wrote my poem about if I were a Housing Crisis and my If I were a Storm writing.

      Great work,
      Tara

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