My name is Laura and I work for the Summer Learning Journey. Wow, you have made such a great start to the programme and I see you have been working away at the activities over the last few days.
Gosh, you really were brave to go up the Sky Tower when you were scared of heights! It is very high up there - I have been up once myself. I felt a little scared looking out through the window at Auckland city, even though I knew I was safe.
You have used some wonderful vocabulary (words) in your writing, like panicking, telescope, and injury. It makes your writing interesting to read!
I really like how you used a lots of interesting words like panicking,injury and lots more. I also love the background how its black and the colour is white of the text it goes really well together and it actually kind of matches your story because the colour black is kind of like terrifying and you recap is kind of like your a bit scared.
Next time you could maybe decorate it a bit more by adding a picture of the sky tower.
I love your recount Keep up the great work By Mehakpreet
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Kia ora Armika,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Laura and I work for the Summer Learning Journey. Wow, you have made such a great start to the programme and I see you have been working away at the activities over the last few days.
Gosh, you really were brave to go up the Sky Tower when you were scared of heights! It is very high up there - I have been up once myself. I felt a little scared looking out through the window at Auckland city, even though I knew I was safe.
You have used some wonderful vocabulary (words) in your writing, like panicking, telescope, and injury. It makes your writing interesting to read!
Thanks for sharing this recount with us!
Best wishes,
Laura
Hi Armika
ReplyDeleteI really like how you used a lots of interesting words like panicking,injury and lots more. I also love the background how its black and the colour is white of the text it goes really well together and it actually kind of matches your story because the colour black is kind of like terrifying and you recap is kind of like your a bit scared.
Next time you could maybe decorate it a bit more by adding a picture of the sky tower.
I love your recount
Keep up the great work
By Mehakpreet